Come promesso, comincia oggi una serie di esempi su come NON si scrive narrativa e quindi per contrasto su come si scrive fantasy. Questa prima scheda riguarda il POV (Point Of View, punto di vista).
Il M********* arrivò nel Ducato A ******** an autumn night, the first to notice it was the Baron S **********.
Baron S ********** T ******* was a big man whose big chin whiskers topped by blacks gave him something of the walrus and something Orange. The noble dressed in black corduroy, a plumed hat, the belt a couple of rifles: more than a nobleman looked like a bandit, who meet at night in a farmer would have died of fright.
That night, as usual, went for wine cellars and taverns late and just now he came home on the back of Urri, his white horse.
It took a lot of courage to go around at that hour, in one night when it seemed that God had begun to cry for all the sins of the world. It was raining that heavy rain that turns the edges of things, the stems of old vines seemed to lean in the cold to count the bones of the feet.
The above is the beginning of the first chapter of a fantasy novel published by a leading Italian publisher. It is clear that the author has chosen as point of view (which was always aware of the concept) that of the Omniscient Narrator, because it is a bit 'difficult Baron thinks of himself as an orangutan. In the narrative of the Omniscient Narrator is a bad choice (that is to say that fantasy is good), so instead of dragging the reader into la storia l'effetto è che il Narratore va a trovare il Lettore
L’effetto dell’alcol si era già dissolto nel gelo e il Barone malediceva il suo cattivo sangue, che lo aveva costretto a uscire per soddisfare il gusto del vino e della buona compagnia. Tutto ciò che desiderava adesso era entrare nel building, get rid of the coat wet and be served a roast mutton with a little 'of boiled beans. The lights of the castle had become close, and seized with a fit of impatience spurred his horse, Baron.
Here, above the POV is passed to the Baron. We remain firmly stuck for nearly six pages, until ...
Baron threw himself on a servant with a shrill cry. There was a brief struggle, then a shot and a body fell to the ground.
Suddenly the POV is no longer the Baron, because for him as he falls to the ground can not be simply a body, or is it him or is the servant, who, from his point of view is not quite the same thing. For the same reason, the POV is not that of a servant. Nor is the Omniscient Narrator, because he knows that everyone should also know who is falling to the ground. Suddenly the POV and then became that of a neutral camera also put a bit 'away in the dark, he sees and does not see much and there can not say. Then there is a blank line and bounces back with:
A black figure, perched on a branch, watching the scene.
Above the POV is it? Perhaps that is still neutral camera, because no one seems to notice the creature on the branch. The phrase would seem to herald the fact that the POV is switched to that of the creature itself, but then the following:
V ********* shouted and shook the body of the Baron, to no avail. Already his blood smeared over the bridge and the rain washed it away.
"Our Lady, I did! Mr. Baron, "
Above the POV seems the servant (or at least back the Narrator), because the creature can not know what it's called the servant (or even knows the camera neutral).
From the castle were the lanterns, lights, dark figures like insects that were busy on deck.
Above the POV could be anyone.
The creature had a strange verse, as a penalty, there was another flash in the woods, but the black shape was not more.
Here again it is not known. Not that the creature nor the other characters, because no one ever seems to have noticed his presence. The Omniscient Narrator does not see things disappear, so the camera should be back neutral.
At this point I think what it means to use the POV fucking dog can be clear to everyone, and I would say then that's all for today.
the next.
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